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Transitions are a little harsh. Particularly the one going back to the A section at 1:51. Ending on what's basically a subdominant chord in a harsh inversion attempting to function as a VII in your original tonic of G minor was pretty jarring, especially since there was no transitional inner voice work.

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Hey!

I think I should point out a few things.

If you decide to add a violin to the piece, it's important you note it down somewhere. If you want to have only this recording of the piece, it won't be a problem, but you expect it to ever be performed, it may be quite confusing to have a violin that play only for a few bars in the end and that wasn't "announced". Also, as you decided to add a violin, why not develop it a bit more? It would probably be very boring for the violinist to play that line, and it also sounds a little inconsistent, as it doesn't appear anywhere in the piece ever again.

Also, I'd experiment more with diferent textures, so that the music doesn't have only one "feel" to it.

Besides that, and what @Monarcheon said, I think this is a nice piece.

Best wishes, Jean.

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