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Hi, 
New around here and wanted to know what feedback anybody can give me on this piece composed last spring, I call it Veil of our Lady. 
This particular piece includes 3 cellos, 2 violin sections and grandpiano. 

I also have many other tunes, similar in instrument selection (not always though). Some also include drums. 

Please have a listen and comment, Thanks again

Sounds nice, not sure what you are going for but in my personal taste it gets a little too simple as far as repetition, harmonic chord structure, and the role of each instrument. It would help to see the score to visualize it but by the sound of it you don’t really develop the theme you start with much. Still, if you are going for simplistic maybe even film music vibe it fits the category well.

Hi Thank you. Yeah its hard to say what I am going for. To be honest with you. 
I want to create and I get in these zones, sequencing. One thing I miss is actually having instruments, but that's another discussion. 
I find it hard to give a human and natural feel to my work. I find it sounds really good and am satisfied, but there is lacking depth in velocity, attack and things like that, that I am still learning how in some cases emulate with/without a midi controller. 
I have other compositions too that I will post at a later time little by little. Thank you again

Hi Jim,

As I often say, a score will help provide solid feedback, as otherwise what you have written hides behind what we perceive to hear. It sounds like you are exploiting a particular motif, somewhat like a pachabel bass (i.e. 1-5-6-3-4-5-4-5) which, if you are going to repeat continuously requires further variation. But what you have done here is identified a pleasant pattern, and the next task for you is to learn how to exploit this.

Thanks for sharing.

Hi Markus, thank you. I am not trained in classical instruments, however, I think you got it. The piano leads but is just a fabric, background, sort of monotonous progression where the cellos jump in and provide a harmonious walk, with violin accents.  

36 minutes ago, Jim Jones said:

Hi Markus, thank you. I am not trained in classical instruments, however, I think you got it. The piano leads but is just a fabric, background, sort of monotonous progression where the cellos jump in and provide a harmonious walk, with violin accents.  

 

Cool. Well keep it up. Everyone starts somewhere!

Nice piece. It's the kind of work I listen to from time to time when I think mesmerising is going to relax me. The motif repeats itself continually aside from a break at about 1'18", with variations in the instruments either side of the piano. It comes over as "minimalist" (like Philip Glass or Mike Nyman), a well-established genre.

In fact if I may be so bold to suggest looking up a track on "Glass - Organ works." track 5: Satyagraha. 

(The chunk on Amazon does it no justice) and while melodically very different from your work evolves in a similar way, almost 10 minutes of it.

Well done.

Thank you for all the feedback. I am not sure if it would be better to do the next one on a separate thread, but I do have a fair number of tracks I'd like feedback on so, I think I will just keep appending to this thread if that's ok. 

Hmmmm, what should I post next though... ok, here's one. Hippidy Hoppidy. The piano came together marvelously, when I merged that lead part that floats in and out of the "piano rhythm' as I recall correctly. Let me know what you think.

 

Instead of staying away for too long between posts, I'm doubling up tonight. Here's a much more recent composition, that is also much more progressive in its symphonic styles employed... if that makes any sense. I call it Return to Marmara. I guess I should post the first one then (realizing), as it is a sequel of sorts to another piece I created entitled: Marmara

Ps. So the background is my love of History. Particularly the middle ages... narrowed down to the High Middle Ages. These two are related to a wonderful island located in the Sea of Marmara. 

"From one Island and one alone, an entire city and empire was born.... Proikonnesos"

aka Island of Marmara

"During most of its history, the island was called "Proikonnesos" (island of the royal dowry), and "Prinkipo", (island of the aristocracy)."

On 10/29/2019 at 6:37 AM, Quinn said:

Nice piece. It's the kind of work I listen to from time to time when I think mesmerising is going to relax me. The motif repeats itself continually aside from a break at about 1'18", with variations in the instruments either side of the piano. It comes over as "minimalist" (like Philip Glass or Mike Nyman), a well-established genre.

In fact if I may be so bold to suggest looking up a track on "Glass - Organ works." track 5: Satyagraha. 

(The chunk on Amazon does it no justice) and while melodically very different from your work evolves in a similar way, almost 10 minutes of it.

Well done.

 

Thank you for the recommendation(s) I will definitely look these up. Cheers

Ok had to do it this way, "Return to Marmara"
 

4 minutes ago, Jim Jones said:

Instead of staying away for too long between posts, I'm doubling up tonight. Here's a much more recent composition, that is also much more progressive in its symphonic styles employed... if that makes any sense. I call it Return to Marmara. I guess I should post the first one then (realizing), as it is a sequel of sorts to another piece I created entitled: Marmara

Ps. So the background is my love of History. Particularly the middle ages... narrowed down to the High Middle Ages. These two are related to a wonderful island located in the Sea of Marmara. 

"From one Island and one alone, an entire city and empire was born.... Proikonnesos"

aka Island of Marmara

"During most of its history, the island was called "Proikonnesos" (island of the royal dowry), and "Prinkipo", (island of the aristocracy)."

 

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When the piano starts to 'turn around' during the second part of this one, I always kind of get... emu (pour nos francophones ;))