In limbo

Hello Guys ! 

First of all, HAPPY NEW YEAR !!! 

I'd like to share with you another of my composition which is " In Limbo " 

Hope you enjoy it 🙂

Julien Kaw

limbes.mp3

:12, Em7 ruined with the b9 at the end of the measure.
:24, don't make your horn play that.
Too many sections with not enough orchestrational development.
1:29-1:37 is a mess.

2 hours ago, Monarcheon said:

:12, Em7 ruined with the b9 at the end of the measure.
:24, don't make your horn play that.
Too many sections with not enough orchestrational development.
1:29-1:37 is a mess.

 

Ok thanks you !

Hi, I think there are some nice elements here. I like the minimalist-esque switch-up between triplets and sixteenth notes in the beginning piano riff. The dramatic piano riff after the (kinda crazy) guitar and bass passage is nice too.

But, as a whole, it seems kind of frenetic and disconnected. There are a lot of ideas happening in less than two minutes of play time. It's a little hard to judge overall without a musical score -- I think adding a score to your posts will definitely attract more reviews. Just from a practical perspective regarding instrumentation, it seems like there are a lot of instruments that are being used extraneously. I hear a harp, a piano, a string section, a flute, a horn, a human voice, a bass guitar, an electric guitar (?), and drums -- which, if the piece were to be intended for a live performance, would be a lot of musicians to get together to rehearse for a two-minute piece. The flute and the voice specifically seem to be used for only a brief passage. Just some things to consider as you move forward.

I also think my comment and Monarcheon's go hand in hand -- if you were to expand this piece into a longer format with more thematic development, you'd also have a chance to spread out that instrumentation and let it breathe, rather than jamming it all into a short amount of time. Just my thoughts -- hope that helps. 

8 minutes ago, Noah Brode said:

Hi, I think there are some nice elements here. I like the minimalist-esque switch-up between triplets and sixteenth notes in the beginning piano riff. The dramatic piano riff after the (kinda crazy) guitar and bass passage is nice too.

But, as a whole, it seems kind of frenetic and disconnected. There are a lot of ideas happening in less than two minutes of play time. It's a little hard to judge overall without a musical score -- I think adding a score to your posts will definitely attract more reviews. Just from a practical perspective regarding instrumentation, it seems like there are a lot of instruments that are being used extraneously. I hear a harp, a piano, a string section, a flute, a horn, a human voice, a bass guitar, an electric guitar (?), and drums -- which, if the piece were to be intended for a live performance, would be a lot of musicians to get together to rehearse for a two-minute piece. The flute and the voice specifically seem to be used for only a brief passage. Just some things to consider as you move forward.

I also think my comment and Monarcheon's go hand in hand -- if you were to expand this piece into a longer format with more thematic development, you'd also have a chance to spread out that instrumentation and let it breathe, rather than jamming it all into a short amount of time. Just my thoughts -- hope that helps. 

 

Thank you !