J.Santos Posted January 1, 2020 Share Posted January 1, 2020 (edited) DELETED Edited April 28, 2020 by J.Santos Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Monarcheon Posted January 2, 2020 Share Posted January 2, 2020 Repeat to the beginning sounds unnatural. Going to 27, I had no reason to think C was a leading tone to C# minor again. Awkward. Dim at the end likely starts too late. The onset of removal of rhythmic intrigue starts at 64, a better place for a poco dim. 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jean Szulc Posted January 7, 2020 Share Posted January 7, 2020 I think the repeat signs are a bit unnecessary. I would rather you doubled the size of each section and add tiny differentiations to it, instead of simply repeating. That's just my opinion. Besides that, I think the coda is a bit offseting. Perhaps it could take the ideas already presented in the rest of the piece and elevate them to a more virtuosic level. However, if I said I didin't enjoy this I would be lying. The themes are well written and the piece flows quite well. Good job. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jawoodruff Posted January 7, 2020 Share Posted January 7, 2020 I'm so confused by the beginning. You introduce a nice motif in measures 4-5... yet.... do away with it like last night's dirty dish water. Would be nice to see more brevity in material. This seems to just fling thematic material at you left and right. The bombastic ending is a nice touch -but... where's the melodic material? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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