Palestrina try out

Hello, my friends

I'm trying to learn Palestrina by myself and I wrote the song bellow on which I try to follow his "rules" in a general way.

I'm sure there are some issues with the piece but I would like you to ear it and comment on what you find, preferencially point to specific points in the piece.

Thank you

Firstly, you have wrong intervals in m. 5.
You have a lot of note-to-note voice exchanges, i.e. D/B to B/D in mm. 1-2, A/F to F/A in m. 3. These aren't bad, but their overuse makes them sound... well, overused.
Parallel 10ths in mm. 9-10 are also not wrong, but don't work so much in his choral style. which is much more based off imitation.

Thanks for the reply, Monarcheon. Useful tips in your answered.

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Firstly, you have wrong intervals in m. 5

I've noticed it too late. It should be a 5th and 3rd.

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You have a lot of note-to-note voice exchanges, i.e. D/B to B/D in mm. 1-2, A/F to F/A in m. 3.

I've noticed that in my writing by the time I was composing it, even in other pieces of mine. Something to take into account in future works.

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Parallel 10ths in mm. 9-10 are also not wrong, but don't work so much in his choral style

I've noticed it as I was writing. Consecutive 3rds limited to 3. Considering this, I left them unchanged but that's something I try to avoid.

Thanks again.:)