Composition Feedback

Please take a listen tot his short piece I composed & programmed yesterday and give me your honest feedback. Its for a story I thought up. 

Accompanying Storyline:

Whilst searching for California's best waffles, two friends find themselves in a remote town untouched by modern technology called Quantic. A young hand maiden mysteriously dies on the night of their arrival leaving the two friends in a precarious position to prove themselves innocent & help the poor townsfolk, who now believe the arrival of foreigners into their town and the death of the young maiden are signs of the town's inevitable doom as stated in the old town's prophecy.

1.Yes, sounds a little epic, reminds me a soundstrack that would be in an adventure movie.

2.Well it make me feel a little curious about the history behind.

3.Yes, sounds a little amateur in the first seconds, because the structure lacks of any buildup it just goes to his maximum point in no time, just a timpani rol as a build up, for ME isn't enough, so it makes it lose some momentum.

4. I actually did like 3 times xd.

5. Totally that's what I just imagine with this, adventure, mistery and that kind of things xd.

Also I had to answer, what DAW do you use?  and which plugins? they sounds really good.

Honest feedback?

Too short to respond to your questionnaire. Game music when the hero is wandering around a town or between towns. Formulaic. Nice sounds though. Were you using loops/presets? A good start but you need to expand on it. 

Honestly, this sounds like an amazing intro to a mystery TV show. I got some Gravity Falls vibes going on there for a bit, I really enjoyed this. 

As music for an intro or outro, this is perfect. If this is meant to be background music then I'd recommend making it longer for sure.

Loved this!

12 hours ago, Quinn said:

Honest feedback?

Too short to respond to your questionnaire. Game music when the hero is wandering around a town or between towns. Formulaic. Nice sounds though. Were you using loops/presets? A good start but you need to expand on it. 

 

Its all programmed from scratch. I love using loops to inspire ideas but none in this case. Its supposed to be a theme or intro to a show of sorts so it's short. 

8 hours ago, SwiggitySwewgity said:

Honestly, this sounds like an amazing intro to a mystery TV show. I got some Gravity Falls vibes going on there for a bit, I really enjoyed this. 

As music for an intro or outro, this is perfect. If this is meant to be background music then I'd recommend making it longer for sure.

Loved this!

 

Thanks for the feedback! Love your profile picture BTW ROFL.