Dawn of Blue Hearts

This is how I show the world "face of depression" and how I feel inside. Hope you enjoy it.

https://soundcloud.com/muhammadreza75/dawn-of-blue-hearts

I like it. But I feel that there is no dialogue. I mean, they fit together. The guitar stays at the same volume and level throughout the entire piece and there's no "climax" 

I feel like the move onto the second half of each antecedent phrase is like a little too short? Like a 7/8? 
The lack of change in that figure is a bit disappointing.