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Nice piece.

I think you could vary the bass part a little. Throughout the whole piece is plays some variation of broken chords in semiquavers and it gets a bit repetitive.

The deceptive cadence 0:58 was good. Definitely unexpected! (From someone who wasn't looking at the score at that point).

In the middle section, when you have an E# in the bass it sounds a bit off. Maybe experiment with the voicing of those chords to find something that works.

I feel the middle section could do more to develop the 1st theme, it would make the piece flow better.

Good work!

  • 2 weeks later...
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Very pleasant to listen too! was almost dream like. infact I bet one could orchestrate this with little difficulty. 

AS mentioned above the left hand could get repetitive after a while, perhaps in the section where the melody is in thirds you could give a more waltz like feel. and maybe try a C section. and turn it into a rondo. this piece has great ideas but I feel like they aren't as developed as they could be.

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