Guitar and Oboe "Desperate" F sharp minor

The third piece of the guitar-woodwind series (3/4) I am waiting for your thoughts and criticisms. Thanks 

Hi, Oboe's melody is nice and works pretty well with the harmony, though I would consider more variation on the guitar accompaniment pattern. You can combine with some arpegiations on the chord, some sustained chords for 1 or 2 bars long or even a oboe solo can work fine. I feel there are too much notes on the accompaniment and without any variation gets a bit boring...I think with a third of the notes you have on the guitar it can work better. Also the ornamentation on the guitar I find it a bit excessive. The ones in the oboe are all right, since it's the solo instrument, but I think the guitar don't need any ornamentals there. 

Also the last 5 bars with the solo guitar sound to me totally disconnected from the previous material, and then modulating in the second bar from the end sounds quite weird. Is there any purpose on that? I would have finished in the bar where the oboe stops playing. 

I think with some ajustments it can be very nice 🙂

I agree. The melody is very nice. But the guitar becomes percussive. 

5 hours ago, Guillem82 said:

Hi, Oboe's melody is nice and works pretty well with the harmony, though I would consider more variation on the guitar accompaniment pattern. You can combine with some arpegiations on the chord, some sustained chords for 1 or 2 bars long or even a oboe solo can work fine. I feel there are too much notes on the accompaniment and without any variation gets a bit boring...I think with a third of the notes you have on the guitar it can work better. Also the ornamentation on the guitar I find it a bit excessive. The ones in the oboe are all right, since it's the solo instrument, but I think the guitar don't need any ornamentals there. 

Also the last 5 bars with the solo guitar sound to me totally disconnected from the previous material, and then modulating in the second bar from the end sounds quite weird. Is there any purpose on that? I would have finished in the bar where the oboe stops playing. 

I think with some ajustments it can be very nice 🙂

 

Hi, guillem. Thank you for listening, and expressing your thoughts. 
I wanted to use a style similar to the accompaniment in the Adagio movement of Marcello's dminor oboe concerto. however, I agree that this accompaniment can be boring if the melody is not very gripping.
I wrote the  improvised ornamentations on the guitar, you might be right about it.
the last 5 bars is a completely different theme. related to this narrative, maybe I can use it in the final work. (guitar - bassoon) Thank you again for the advice.
 

3 hours ago, Luis Hernández said:

I agree. The melody is very nice. But the guitar becomes percussive. 

 

thank you for listening and expressing your thoughts. I accept the percussive effect of the guitar. I used a monotonous accompaniment to express the mood, but I agree that it should be improved.

11 hours ago, ClasiCompose said:

Hi, guillem. Thank you for listening, and expressing your thoughts. 
I wanted to use a style similar to the accompaniment in the Adagio movement of Marcello's dminor oboe concerto. however, I agree that this accompaniment can be boring if the melody is not very gripping.
I wrote the  improvised ornamentations on the guitar, you might be right about it.
the last 5 bars is a completely different theme. related to this narrative, maybe I can use it in the final work. (guitar - bassoon) Thank you again for the advice.
 

 

I know the piece you mean, J.S. Bach addapted it for Keyboard from Marcello's Oboe Concerto.

But I think something in the style would work better with your melody. Also posible to integrate melody and accompaniment both played by the guitar, but of course it would be more difficult to play for the guitar 🙂. 

10 hours ago, Guillem82 said:

I know the piece you mean, J.S. Bach addapted it for Keyboard from Marcello's Oboe Concerto.

But I think something in the style would work better with your melody. Also posible to integrate melody and accompaniment both played by the guitar, but of course it would be more difficult to play for the guitar 🙂. 

 

 

Thanks Guillem. Cavatina guitar is also a piece I like to play. I need to develop arpeggio writing for this.
yes my style is more like dramatic movie music, but sometimes I am inspired by baroque.  I will work on accompaniment.

I think the way you have the guitar hammer on the whole chord at once is very unrealistic of how a guitar would naturally be strummed.  It would also be nice if you applied some kind of rhythm guitar pattern to the chords rather than just play slow quarter notes - of course it might start sounding too much like a pop song if you did that (or maybe not .. who knows .. as long as you don't swing your rhythmic pattern it could still be classical).  Maybe you could alternate between guitar chords and melodic counterpoint to the oboe melody.  Just some suggestions.

4 hours ago, PaperComposer said:

I think the way you have the guitar hammer on the whole chord at once is very unrealistic of how a guitar would naturally be strummed.  It would also be nice if you applied some kind of rhythm guitar pattern to the chords rather than just play slow quarter notes - of course it might start sounding too much like a pop song if you did that (or maybe not .. who knows .. as long as you don't swing your rhythmic pattern it could still be classical).  Maybe you could alternate between guitar chords and melodic counterpoint to the oboe melody.  Just some suggestions.

 

thanks for listening. In fact, I play them before I write to the for guitar, maybe they can be played in a fast arpeggio (pima). thanks for sharing your thoughts.