Aled Edwards Posted September 10, 2020 Posted September 10, 2020 Hi everyone, just wanted to share a song I wrote and produced. I'd love to hear what you thinkHeartbroken (master).mp3 MP3 Play / pause JavaScript is required. 0:00 0:00 volume > next menu Heartbroken (master) > next 1 Quote
Luis Hernández Posted September 10, 2020 Posted September 10, 2020 (edited) Cool, I like changes in rhythm and the bass... I had the feeling of listening to The Smiths, the voice of the singer is soft and beautiful. Edited September 10, 2020 by Luis Hernández 1 Quote
Aled Edwards Posted September 10, 2020 Author Posted September 10, 2020 (edited) Hi, thank you, appreciate it! Edited September 10, 2020 by Aled Edwards Quote
PeterthePapercomPoser Posted September 10, 2020 Posted September 10, 2020 I enjoyed it! There is some tonal ambiguity in this. It's unclear whether your chord progression starts on the bVI or the IV. Assuming that the piece is in a major key the progression is IV, ii, I, vi. In a minor key it reads as bVI, iv, bIII, i. From the introduction and the end I infer that the key is major though. I could listen to this over and over without getting tired of it. I just wished I understood all the lyrics. Would you post the lyrics here in the forum for us to read? I like how the singer spends most of the time on the major 3rd - it's a great mood you set here. Great job! 1 Quote
Aled Edwards Posted September 11, 2020 Author Posted September 11, 2020 Hey, thanks, glad you liked it! And yes it's in a major key. Here are the lyrics: Overcast with no sun, on a rocky beach Seems to fit the mood, I wait for you Show up and you're late, going a different way Seems like our time, it has run out Heartbroken, you've left me heartbroken Harsh were the words you said to me I'll take my turn in misery Three weeks have gone by, and I just pass the time Dimming all the lights, I'm on my own You are not that great, I have seen of late Can't believe that I thought you were the dream Heartbroken, you've left me heartbroken Harsh were the words you said to me I'll take my turn in misery Heartbroken, you've left me heartbroken Heartbroken, you've left me heartbroken 1 Quote
Thatguy v2.0 Posted September 22, 2020 Posted September 22, 2020 Ever heard of Steely Dan? Not that your music sounds similar, but they had a cool way of writing lyrics that were dark or sad underneath the surface of upbeat groovy music. I like that clash, nice work! Post more of your work mate 😄 1 Quote
Aled Edwards Posted September 26, 2020 Author Posted September 26, 2020 Thanks! I have heard some of their music but I'm not super familiar with them. And cheers, I will be posting more Quote
Harrysalvatore1989 Posted October 14, 2020 Posted October 14, 2020 (edited) I like it. Very light and "comfortable" song. I would say the song, you can listen to the replay. The soloist's voice is super. But in my opinion, the melody is too cheerful for such a name, although everyone has their own vision) Edited October 14, 2020 by Harrysalvatore1989 Quote
Aled Edwards Posted October 22, 2020 Author Posted October 22, 2020 Hi, thanks! Yeah, I was going for a bit of contrast Quote
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