cute piano

Hello, here's a cute piano song!
I'd like to know what I can improve, while preserving this style. Thanks!

piano.mp3

Romantic Ballad style, a bit mainstream and Disney for my taste, but sound nice though :)

I would leave it like it is.

Overall this was nice with lots of variation in the harmonic voicings (such as plenty use of inversion).  Also, I think you pretty much use the whole range of the piano, so great job there.  I think there are some mistakes in the right hand?  At 1:52 it sounds like the right hand runs into some accidental chromatics.  An enjoyable piece overall.  Thanks for sharing!

On 9/27/2020 at 11:03 AM, Guillem82 said:

Romantic Ballad style, a bit mainstream and Disney for my taste, but sound nice though 🙂

I would leave it like it is.

 

Thanks! Yeah, romantic ballad sounds about right 😀

21 hours ago, PaperComposer said:

Overall this was nice with lots of variation in the harmonic voicings (such as plenty use of inversion).  Also, I think you pretty much use the whole range of the piano, so great job there.

Thank you! What do you think I should focus on improving composition-wise? What would be a good topic to study?

21 hours ago, PaperComposer said:

At 1:52 it sounds like the right hand runs into some accidental chromatics.

Ah, I wanted to try out lowered 9th on the V chord there for quirkiness. Does it sound out of place?

15 minutes ago, BC345 said:

What do you think I should focus on improving composition-wise? What would be a good topic to study?

Well you already have some interesting bass movement in relation to the melody - maybe you could explore the use of some kind of countermelody?  Just an idea.

18 minutes ago, BC345 said:

Ah, I wanted to try out lowered 9th on the V chord there for quirkiness. Does it sound out of place?

Well - at 1:52 it sounds like you use both a b9 and a #9 one after the other.  There are places where such a treatment would make sense and some probably wouldn't find it objectionable but to me it sounded out of place.  Maybe if you used just a b9 and then immediately resolved it down to the octave it would be a nice momentary color tone.

I was about to tell you the same, min 1:52 accidental look a bit out of the place. The rest works fine. I like how you finish it in the upper register. 

I see, I'll be more careful with accidentals 😶

Thanks for the advice and critique, guys, I'll look into counter-melodies, then.