Two pieces for Piano

Dear community,

here are two short pieces I completed for solo piano.

1) Piece for Piano in F major, L1a

https://youtu.be/FRlum_SaoSg

2) Piece for Piano in A minor, L2a

https://youtu.be/SfvGUGrWroY

The F major piece is a bit of a work out for the right hand. The first 4 bars are modelled after Bach's Prelude in C, Book 1 of WTC but with a harmonic modification in bar 3. Then of course I go off in my own direction. The right hand plays the harmony throughout with left hand having a sort of melody every so often.

The A-minor piece is mostly 2-part counterpoint with both hands competing with each other to play the main theme though I think the right hand wins in the end. Middle section is in C major with both hands now behaving themselves and taking it in turns to play the melody. Incidentally sections A and D are both invertible counterpoints of each other (that copy paste function came in handy then!)

They are called L1a, L2a because there are string versions, L1b and L2b, which I'll also post at some point. The F major piece is originally for piano but later scored for strings whereas the A minor piece is originally for strings but then scored for piano.

Enjoy!

Thanks for sharing! I'll try and give feedback as best I can.

First piece:
One comment I would make is that the piece could do with some more variation – if not in terms of rhythm or melody, then in terms of harmony. Consider the first movement of Beethoven's Moonlight Sonata – although the rhythm and melodic movement are largely unvaried throughout, he counteracts this and keeps things interesting by moving through different keys and tonal centres. Whereas your piece never strays very far away from F major/D minor – perhaps you could experiment with some more distant keys?

Second piece:
There's more rhythmic variation in this one, and I like the way that the different rhythmic motifs recur throughout the piece. One comment I would make, though, is that the rhythm changes between sections seem to be quite straightforward – it feels a little bit formulaic to me. Perhaps you could try switching up the rhythm unpredictably in the middle of a section once or twice, something like that? Also, as with the other piece, maybe you could try straying further from the main tonal centre to keep things interesting for the listener.

Hope this helps!

@Alexander Lim

For me, they're both too dull.

There's a lack of: rhythm variety, modulations, dynamics, etc.

I'd say... try to approach the piece as if you were the player it was given to.

Have in mind- you have enough skill to perform the piece, and yet you have to practice it over and over again.

How would that feel? Would you... say... get bored easily? Would it be fun to perform?

Would you be able to express yourself through the piece or would it be pretty similar to the computer's performance?