Lento and Allegro for Recorder

Lento and Allegro - Full Score.pdf

I composed it for recorder, but I plan on rearranging it for Tuba.

In the Lento what jumps out at me is how you overuse (imo) sequencing (measures 5 - 8 ).  Sequencing is a type of repetition just at a different pitch level because the ear quickly recognizes the pattern so it's best not to overuse it.  Usually the magic number of times a sequence can be repeated is 3 but in bars 5 - 8 you repeat the pattern 4 times and it gets audibly tiresome.  I personally would look for some clever way to break the pattern after the 3rd time it's repeated.  Also there are some places in the Lento that sound like a run-on sentence in the melody (measure 25).  That whole section around and following measure 25 sounds very meandering and aimless to me.  It just lacks a clear phrase structure.  There are natural places that you could seek out in your melodies where the melody settles down and rests and pauses before going on which would avoid this kind of aimless wandering that I perceive here.  Whenever your main theme returns you also seem to get your groove back so to speak with this idea of a natural ebb and flow to your melody so it's clear you know how to do that.  Your Allegro also doesn't seem to have any of the aforementioned problems and is (to me) much more enjoyable than the slow movement.  Besides those remarks above this was an enjoyable piece!

I really enjoyed that! Specially the Allegro. I though the melodic flow was great and I liked how nicely used the circle of fifths was. I agree with PaperComposer about the Lento being somehow a little bit more repetitive and less exiting. I do not have the skills to analize the piece as well as PaperComposer did so I will just comment on two things I though about while listening to it, which are only a matter of personal taste.

First, I felt the root (the note C) in measures 3-5 was repeated a little too much. The C in measure 4 might be better as an E to avoid the repetition. Also, I somehow had the need in measure 5 to hear the same melodic motive from measure 4 (the ascending scale to A) with a different ending after reaching the A. Lastly, I also would have liked to find more sixteenth notes in the bass since there are many in the melody. For example, in measure 1, the bass movement from G to E could be changed to G-F-E, which would then create a kind of "answer" to the sixteenth notes of the flute. Same in measure 2. As I said, these changes are all a matter of personal preference and since I have not tried them out they might even sound bad.

I enjoyed the piece! Thanks for sharing!