String Quartet - Is the middle section working?

I'm pretty satisfied with the first section with repeats, which also ends the whole piece.
 

The polyphonic part before da capo is something I just wrote and I wonder if it works in the context? And the transition between different sections, do they work?

I think all the parts work really well together!  I really like how you harmonized the main theme in the beginning by starting on the subdominant (or is it a supertonic in 1st inversion?).  Just by looking at the theme by itself that kind of approach is unexpected and it really gives your main theme harmonic freshness.  The part that I would modify if this were my composition is the part where the viola melody is accompanied by the rest of the ensemble pizzicato.  it seems like just straight quarter notes makes it sound too march-like for me.  Really quite an enjoyable and quaint little theme you've written!  Thanks for sharing.

11 minutes ago, PaperComposer said:

I think all the parts work really well together!  I really like how you harmonized the main theme in the beginning by starting on the subdominant (or is it a supertonic in 1st inversion?).  Just by looking at the theme by itself that kind of approach is unexpected and it really gives your main theme harmonic freshness.  The part that I would modify if this were my composition is the part where the viola melody is accompanied by the rest of the ensemble pizzicato.  it seems like just straight quarter notes makes it sound too march-like for me.  Really quite an enjoyable and quaint little theme you've written!  Thanks for sharing.

 

Thanks a lot for the feedback. Can't believe how quick you were at responding to this piece!
I agree that part feels a bit march-like, I don't really know how to get off that. I felt the melody was inspired by march, but if I change the accompaniment will it feel different? Or do you have any suggestions?

5 minutes ago, Olov said:

I agree that part feels a bit march-like, I don't really know how to get off that. I felt the melody was inspired by march, but if I change the accompaniment will it feel different? Or do you have any suggestions?

Well - if it were my piece I would stagger the accompanimental pizzicati so that they sometimes land only on the offbeat while sometimes on the downbeat.  I guess it's just a matter of coming up with an interesting rhythm for those pizzicati that works well with the melody.  Anyway - that's my suggestion.

9 minutes ago, Olov said:

Thanks a lot for the feedback.

You're welcome!  It was enjoyable to hear your music!

19 hours ago, PaperComposer said:

Well - if it were my piece I would stagger the accompanimental pizzicati so that they sometimes land only on the offbeat while sometimes on the downbeat.  I guess it's just a matter of coming up with an interesting rhythm for those pizzicati that works well with the melody.  Anyway - that's my suggestion.

You're welcome!  It was enjoyable to hear your music!

 

Okay! I've tried to lighten up the pizzicato accompaniment and also improved the counterpoint and some of the voiceleading in the middle.

I think I'm satisfied and I feel the piece is complete now.

Thanks for your help!

Like Papercomposer has said, it is a delightful little quaint piece you have here. Harmonically it appears and sounds fine.

I particularly liked the ending of the B section, which provides a necessary contrast in texture to the preceding part.

Keep it up!

2 hours ago, Markus Boyd said:

Like Papercomposer has said, it is a delightful little quaint piece you have here. Harmonically it appears and sounds fine.

I particularly liked the ending of the B section, which provides a necessary contrast in texture to the preceding part.

Keep it up!

 

 

Thanks a lot Markus! Glad you liked it

Hey, guys. I'm kind of satisfied with this piece but somehow it seems a bit dull? Does this piece seem like a good one I can record with live musicians?

Or do I rather record Persia II, which is a sequel to an old piece of mine, I finished it some week ago. What qualities do the different pieces have?
I suppose since nobody responded to Persia II, that it's not that great 😆
 

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