Tableau No.1

Hi everyone,

Here is a composition I created this summer, a bit of a fantasia (as usual 😀): 

The score is available here:  https://imslp.org/wiki/Tableau_No.1_(Piaser%2C_Julien)

Hope you enjoy the listening, any feedback is welcome!

Take care! 

Are the Dies Irae and Across the Stars reference meant for?

The accompaniment was too boring for my opinion.

Check out those pieces if you referenced accidentally?

H, I like this piece. For me, the ostinato works quite well, first as a sort of intro or "prelude" in a mild bluesy style which leads to a more romantic part with the coming of 3/4 time signature. The second part develops properly to a climax in m. 43. The piece turns rhapsodic (or "fantasia") from this point on, but its good that the previous motives are used again.

The section starting at 1:12 is a bit unrelated to the beginning of the piece.  Especially on first hearing the two parts don't seem to mesh very well.  Then when you bring back the material from the beginning at the end it kind of rounds out the piece which is a good idea but the sudden tempo change is also a bit out of place imo.  The beginning material I would describe as kind of dreary and almost dull and sometimes chorale-like.  Then the part at 1:12 is more mournful and tormented.  Your approach throughout is very classical but your figurations are lacking in vitality.  Overall it was a unique piece which was quite enjoyable despite its weaknesses so thanks for sharing!

22 hours ago, Rabbival507 said:

Are the Dies Irae and Across the Stars reference meant for?

No, not at all... I listened to them, but couldn't see the link...

22 hours ago, Rabbival507 said:

The accompaniment was too boring for my opinion.

Thanks for the comment, will try to improve on that.

18 hours ago, Luis Hernández said:

H, I like this piece. For me, the ostinato works quite well, first as a sort of intro or "prelude" in a mild bluesy style which leads to a more romantic part with the coming of 3/4 time signature. The second part develops properly to a climax in m. 43. The piece turns rhapsodic (or "fantasia") from this point on, but its good that the previous motives are used again.

Thanks Luis, this is very useful feedback and encouraging. I think I will have to stick to this "fantasia" style for quite some time (for the lack of constraints, I admit :-)

8 hours ago, PaperComposer said:

The section starting at 1:12 is a bit unrelated to the beginning of the piece.  Especially on first hearing the two parts don't seem to mesh very well

Good to have some feedback on that, not so easy to work out when you're too involved...

8 hours ago, PaperComposer said:

the sudden tempo change is also a bit out of place imo.

Same remark as the previous one, thx for the constructive feedback.

8 hours ago, PaperComposer said:

kind of dreary and almost dull and sometimes chorale-like

Are you referring to the part up to 0'54 only or to the whole section up to 1'12?

8 hours ago, PaperComposer said:

figurations

I'm not sure I understood the term "figuration"... Did you mean the accompaniment?

8 hours ago, PaperComposer said:

Overall it was a unique piece which was quite enjoyable despite its weaknesses so thanks for sharing!

Thanks for listening and for the comments, very much appreciated! 

4 hours ago, mazeth said:

No, not at all... I listened to them, but couldn't see the link...

Your 1:12 sounds like Across the Stars. (which is:) 

Dies Irae is all over the place, for example:

  which is just the same as 

4 hours ago, mazeth said:

Are you referring to the part up to 0'54 only or to the whole section up to 1'12?

Up to 0:54 it sounds like it's lacking in energy.

4 hours ago, mazeth said:

I'm not sure I understood the term "figuration"... Did you mean the accompaniment?

Yes - sometimes you have accompanimental figures that despite being faster lack drive.  Maybe that's just a tempo issue?  I just felt like much of your piece was lacking in energy and vitality.  That could be remedied with dynamic changes as well - it felt like the piece was all pretty much one dynamic throughout - it didn't get louder and it didn't get quieter.

22 hours ago, Rabbival507 said:

Your 1:12 sounds like Across the Stars. (which is:) 

Dies Irae is all over the place, for example:

  which is just the same as 

 

 

 

Thanks, I hadn't noticed... 

22 hours ago, PaperComposer said:

Up to 0:54 it sounds like it's lacking in energy.

Thanks for the clarification, useful feedback.

22 hours ago, PaperComposer said:

That could be remedied with dynamic changes as well - it felt like the piece was all pretty much one dynamic throughout - it didn't get louder and it didn't get quieter.

Much clearer, thanks for the recommendations!