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Here's a waltz I wrote as part of a collection I'm working on. Give me feedback please! This is the first piano piece I've ever put on here.

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I think when you use sequence in the melody too many times in a row like you have in the first four measures it starts to sound too predictable and bland imo.  Also the fioraturas/roulades you have in measures 19 and 49 sound kind of random and like a note-salad to me.  I think you would have been on better footing using repeated sequences in the fioraturas as that would've set up some kind of comprehensible pattern to the notes.  Chopin usually constructs his fioraturas as elaborations/variations of previous melodic material giving them a sense of logic.  Also I think a more appropriate duration for the notes in the fioratura would be 8th notes and would also make it look nicer imo.  It's a pretty nice first piano piece!  Thanks for sharing!

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Hmm not bad, but seems quite messy. Do you have like a plan/organisation for this?

This isn't a bad attempt, with quite a lot of improvements needed. I concur with what PeterthePapercomPoser said. I prefer if there is some form to this music.

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