"Disquietude" - for Orchestra

Hi all,

I did some more tweaking on this piece.  I will go over it with my mentor 1 more time.

What do you think?  Suggestions always welcome.  The title says it all~!

This is a great piece. I love it.

Overall a bit inconsistent. It needs work, as you probably know.

44 minutes ago, Minx said:

Overall a bit inconsistent. It needs work, as you probably know.

 

Hi,thanks for taking the time to listen to the work.  As many participants on this forum, I am an amateur composer, in that I did not major in composition in a university music degree program.  So I am always interested in suggestions to improve my work.  Do you think you can be a bit more detailed in your posting?  I am really interested in the observation that the work needs more consistency.  Are you referring to the thematic development, harmonic movement, transitions, voice leading, juxtaposition of sections, orchestration, etc?  Maybe you could point/highlight those sections for me.  In this way I can discuss your observations with my mentor for further exploration.

16 hours ago, Luis Hernández said:

This is a great piece. I love it.

 

Thanks for taking the time to listen to my composition.  I am very pleased and encouraged you enjoyed my work.  Is there anything in particular that held your attention?

4 hours ago, MJFOBOE said:

Are you referring to the thematic development, harmonic movement, transitions, voice leading, juxtaposition of sections, orchestration, etc?  Maybe you could point/highlight those sections for me.  In this way I can discuss your observations with my mentor for further exploration.

 

Is your mentor a trained composer? If so, why do you want me to teach you? It's not that serious. You lack experience and knowledge, that's all.

I think the brass section is underused but, perhaps, in the final part. 

Also, I would like to hear a clear climax in the piece.

11 minutes ago, Minx said:

Is your mentor a trained composer? If so, why do you want me to teach you? It's not that serious. You lack experience and knowledge, that's all.

 

Yes, he has a DMA from a prestigious university and teaches composition as well as being a Music Director of a few orchestras.  Besides, all suggestions from the forum should be helpful ... that's why we post.