2nd Prelude - "Street Lights"

2nd Prelude. Constructive criticism is most welcome.

It sounds great! I'm not one to critique, so I really just wanted to comment and express how much I liked this piece! 

Lovely piece! I like how you walk through different harmonies to create the effect of instability throughout the middle section. I especially like the ending, unresolved. It's like street lights, seemingly unending. Nice job!

On 10/16/2021 at 3:34 AM, bored_comedy said:

It sounds great! I'm not one to critique, so I really just wanted to comment and express how much I liked this piece! 

 

Thank you very much. Means a lot!

On 10/17/2021 at 5:54 PM, TCGFerrum said:

Lovely piece! I like how you walk through different harmonies to create the effect of instability throughout the middle section. I especially like the ending, unresolved. It's like street lights, seemingly unending. Nice job!

 

Thanks a lot! Means a lot to me!

I really loved the opening mood and thematic material.  It is very much "Satie" in feel.  However, I found the variation(s) of the initial theme somewhat less satisfying.  For me it created a slightly different feel then the opening.  I would have wanted maybe something different to enhance or juxtapose the initial thematic material;  however, let me add   - It is truly a lovely work and a well composed musical selection.

Mark

On 10/26/2021 at 8:12 PM, MJFOBOE said:

I really loved the opening mood and thematic material.  It is very much "Satie" in feel.  However, I found the variation(s) of the initial theme somewhat less satisfying.  For me it created a slightly different feel then the opening.  I would have wanted maybe something different to enhance or juxtapose the initial thematic material;  however, let me add   - It is truly a lovely work and a well composed musical selection.

Mark

 

Thanks for the much appreciated constructive criticism! And thanks! Means a lot!

I thought it was really beautiful, and I appreciated that it’s chill and straightforward. It sounds semi-improvisational to me, which is cool.

Mss. 47 on to the end are interesting. I thought some harmonic choices were really nice (like mss. 55-56), but some felt “forced” (like mss. 49-50). But I would rather hear someone venture out, than stay harmonically static. Another thing is I noticed some unnecessary notes — for example, mss. 28-34 make perfect sense, in terms of how it would play under a pianist’s hands. Even the 10th span on mss. 32-33 are fine, being on the black keys, a simple roll of fingers if the right hand is small. But mss. 40 and especially 41 are written awkwardly, even with a rolled chord. On the 3rd and 4th beat of ms. 40, just move that Ab on your right hand thumb to either an Eb or F (depending on your desired chord), and on ms. 41, simply moving the G in the r.h. thumb up an octave solves the problems. 
 

I think the piece overall is really nice! Thanks for sharing 😃

16 hours ago, SergeOfArniVillage said:

I thought it was really beautiful, and I appreciated that it’s chill and straightforward. It sounds semi-improvisational to me, which is cool.

 

Mss. 47 on to the end are interesting. I thought some harmonic choices were really nice (like mss. 55-56), but some felt “forced” (like mss. 49-50). But I would rather hear someone venture out, than stay harmonically static. Another thing is I noticed some unnecessary notes — for example, mss. 28-34 make perfect sense, in terms of how it would play under a pianist’s hands. Even the 10th span on mss. 32-33 are fine, being on the black keys, a simple roll of fingers if the right hand is small. But mss. 40 and especially 41 are written awkwardly, even with a rolled chord. On the 3rd and 4th beat of ms. 40, just move that Ab on your right hand thumb to either an Eb or F (depending on your desired chord), and on ms. 41, simply moving the G in the r.h. thumb up an octave solves the problems. 
 

I think the piece overall is really nice! Thanks for sharing 😃

 

Wow! Thanks for the really insightful and well thought out analysis of my work. I learnt a lot from it. And I am very glad you liked it! 🙂 🙂