The Carrying of the Cross

 I do know what will come later in the piece, but idk what should come right after the beginning. 

Also I realized, do you think that the opening sounds too similar to the ocarina of time theme? I didn't steal the melody, but I stole the concept of the melody

Hello!

I liked this piece! And yes, that motif was something that grabbed my attention really quick 😄 - I know the motif from Super Mario Bros 3 - I think it is when the magic whistle/flute is used (maybe Koji Kondo reused the motif on Zelda?). It is not nearly as noticeable on the second occurence in measure 9, perhaps because it's played in a lower octave. Maybe you could just change some detail in the beginning of measure 5, like the descending notes?

Also the note A in measure 7 felt like it was not fitting with the harmonics, maybe try something more diatonic there?

On 10/23/2021 at 3:50 PM, Olov said:

Hello!

I liked this piece! And yes, that motif was something that grabbed my attention really quick 😄 - I know the motif from Super Mario Bros 3 - I think it is when the magic whistle/flute is used (maybe Koji Kondo reused the motif on Zelda?). It is not nearly as noticeable on the second occurence in measure 9, perhaps because it's played in a lower octave. Maybe you could just change some detail in the beginning of measure 5, like the descending notes?

Also the note A in measure 7 felt like it was not fitting with the harmonics, maybe try something more diatonic there?

 

yeah, I will probably just get rid of those quick descending notes