Pianotrio, superficial?

My fellowcomposers,

I have a question for you since I am struggling with something new. And I am spamming in this section too much, I know, but I am do some new experiments lately so feedback is welcome 🙂. 

Here it comes: Does this music for violin, cello and piano strike you as superficial? If you say 'yes' this doesn't mean necessarily something bad as there is art which deliberately make use of superficiality. And maybe I should too. Maybe I don't do it too much. So don't feel bad if you say yes. Or no. Whatever is true for your experience.

I didn't know how to answer your question and whether this particular music or any kind of music can be termed "superficial" so I found this discussion of what constitutes superficiality in music on another forum:

How do you define superficiality in music or one's work?

9 hours ago, PeterthePapercomPoser said:

I didn't know how to answer your question and whether this particular music or any kind of music can be termed "superficial" so I found this discussion of what constitutes superficiality in music on another forum:

How do you define superficiality in music or one's work?

 

Thank you for sharing your thoughts. I guess when it feels for me to be (a bit) superficial I am doing something I rather should do something different.

10 hours ago, PeterthePapercomPoser said:

I didn't know how to answer your question and whether this particular music or any kind of music can be termed "superficial" so I found this discussion of what constitutes superficiality in music on another forum:

How do you define superficiality in music or one's work?

 

I guess my problem with the piece is that the harmonic progression is quite unusual and it feels a bit random. In part my goal was to swirl around in free way while building up and going back again. But now I did I happen not to like it so much. Although the harmonic progression makes it feel alive for me it also lacks a deeper logic, except for to swirl around... Is this clear for you what I mean?

I think your piano trio is an exercise in constant variation while still staying related to the beginning.  It's cool though that it manages to return to the original theme towards the end.  I'd say it doesn't however have a very conclusive ending - it just stops.  I personally found it interesting and entertaining though a bit muted.  It never really flourishes to its full potential imo.  Like - there's no climax or high point to which it builds.  It develops mostly through rhythmic diminution and harmonic changes making it sound more exciting and full of motion.  I guess I feel like the dynamics in the piece are a bit flat and could stand to grow more.  The way you developed the piece I think is very interesting though.  Thanks for sharing!

Your suggestion on dynamic led me to play with it more... Also working on the end. I'm not there but it gets better...