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I like how you're experimenting with modes and juxtaposing more distant chords next to each other!  I think despite that the chord changes are rarely jarring and you manage to create a lucid emotional listening experience.  You start out with an interesting dorian flavor that develops into some interesting chromaticism later on.  Once again though, I think you should be consistent between the left and right hand using either sharps or flats but not both at any given time.  Like in meas. 24, switching between E major and Gb is okay but the B in the right hand is foreign to the key of Gb major and should instead be notated as Cb to make the step-wise movement of the melody more obvious.  That's just one example of what I mean though.  The melody is quite interesting and easy to remember.  It's really tuneful.  Thanks for sharing!

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1 hour ago, PeterthePapercomPoser said:

I like how you're experimenting with modes and juxtaposing more distant chords next to each other!  I think despite that the chord changes are rarely jarring and you manage to create a lucid emotional listening experience.  You start out with an interesting dorian flavor that develops into some interesting chromaticism later on.  Once again though, I think you should be consistent between the left and right hand using either sharps or flats but not both at any given time.  Like in meas. 24, switching between E major and Gb is okay but the B in the right hand is foreign to the key of Gb major and should instead be notated as Cb to make the step-wise movement of the melody more obvious.  That's just one example of what I mean though.  The melody is quite interesting and easy to remember.  It's really tuneful.  Thanks for sharing!

 

Thanks for listening! I'll pay more attention to the enharmonics.

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It's a solid piece. I like the adventurous attitude of it all.

There is a very symmetrical sort of harmony going on.

Not saying it's bad, if harmony is your concern, you may

want to have a look at that.

  

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8 hours ago, marsbars said:

It's a solid piece. I like the adventurous attitude of it all.

There is a very symmetrical sort of harmony going on.

Not saying it's bad, if harmony is your concern, you may

want to have a look at that.

  

 

Thanks for listening! ^^

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