ComposedBySam Posted January 16, 2022 Posted January 16, 2022 This piece was mostly an attempt in improving my harmony beyond what is conventional. Constructive feedback is most appreciated and welcome. 1 Quote
PeterthePapercomPoser Posted January 17, 2022 Posted January 17, 2022 I like how you're experimenting with modes and juxtaposing more distant chords next to each other! I think despite that the chord changes are rarely jarring and you manage to create a lucid emotional listening experience. You start out with an interesting dorian flavor that develops into some interesting chromaticism later on. Once again though, I think you should be consistent between the left and right hand using either sharps or flats but not both at any given time. Like in meas. 24, switching between E major and Gb is okay but the B in the right hand is foreign to the key of Gb major and should instead be notated as Cb to make the step-wise movement of the melody more obvious. That's just one example of what I mean though. The melody is quite interesting and easy to remember. It's really tuneful. Thanks for sharing! 1 Quote
ComposedBySam Posted January 17, 2022 Author Posted January 17, 2022 1 hour ago, PeterthePapercomPoser said: I like how you're experimenting with modes and juxtaposing more distant chords next to each other! I think despite that the chord changes are rarely jarring and you manage to create a lucid emotional listening experience. You start out with an interesting dorian flavor that develops into some interesting chromaticism later on. Once again though, I think you should be consistent between the left and right hand using either sharps or flats but not both at any given time. Like in meas. 24, switching between E major and Gb is okay but the B in the right hand is foreign to the key of Gb major and should instead be notated as Cb to make the step-wise movement of the melody more obvious. That's just one example of what I mean though. The melody is quite interesting and easy to remember. It's really tuneful. Thanks for sharing! Thanks for listening! I'll pay more attention to the enharmonics. 1 Quote
marsbars Posted January 20, 2022 Posted January 20, 2022 It's a solid piece. I like the adventurous attitude of it all. There is a very symmetrical sort of harmony going on. Not saying it's bad, if harmony is your concern, you may want to have a look at that. 1 Quote
ComposedBySam Posted January 20, 2022 Author Posted January 20, 2022 8 hours ago, marsbars said: It's a solid piece. I like the adventurous attitude of it all. There is a very symmetrical sort of harmony going on. Not saying it's bad, if harmony is your concern, you may want to have a look at that. Thanks for listening! ^^ Quote
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