camch23 Posted February 26, 2022 Posted February 26, 2022 Any feedback is appreciated, this is the first time I'm sharing a composition with others. https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ac0N4155-naKSfQ-lI3in4plNS71jDfZ/view?usp=sharing https://drive.google.com/file/d/1evdOrRNof3Wx4iYYQHaL6D5xt59oAOSg/view?usp=sharing Quote
MJFOBOE Posted February 26, 2022 Posted February 26, 2022 I don't understand this work. What is your objective? What are you trying to communicate? Mark Quote
camch23 Posted February 26, 2022 Author Posted February 26, 2022 (edited) 18 minutes ago, MJFOBOE said: I don't understand this work. What is your objective? What are you trying to communicate? Mark The arc of the symphony begins painfully, then becomes optimistic and playful. As the end comes near, however, the mood is becomes unsure and melancholy again. It is mainly in the key of F# minor. This is just the first of four movements: Largo doloroso, Allegro vivo, Allegro animato, and the Finale. Edited February 26, 2022 by camch23 Quote
EnriqueMZ Posted February 27, 2022 Posted February 27, 2022 Hi, I think it's a good work, but maybe the musical ideas are not completely cohesive? Quote
camch23 Posted February 28, 2022 Author Posted February 28, 2022 18 hours ago, EnriqueMZ said: Hi, I think it's a good work, but maybe the musical ideas are not completely cohesive? Thanks, can you share an example of what you mean? Quote
EnriqueMZ Posted February 28, 2022 Posted February 28, 2022 7 hours ago, camch23 said: Thanks, can you share an example of what you mean? Yes, I think the transitions for example, bars 46-49 are not well connected with the next part, it doesn't feel organic (to me), and something similar happens in bars 61-62, the transition is abrupt (I mean in emotions) but without connection. It's just my opinion, maybe I'm wrong but those were the details/things that I think are not well developed. Quote
camch23 Posted February 28, 2022 Author Posted February 28, 2022 4 hours ago, EnriqueMZ said: Yes, I think the transitions for example, bars 46-49 are not well connected with the next part, it doesn't feel organic (to me), and something similar happens in bars 61-62, the transition is abrupt (I mean in emotions) but without connection. It's just my opinion, maybe I'm wrong but those were the details/things that I think are not well developed. I see what you mean about 61-62. I can make that transition much smoother, but at 46 I was trying to go for a drastic change in mood from previous measures. Do you notice anything else? Quote
EnriqueMZ Posted February 28, 2022 Posted February 28, 2022 4 hours ago, camch23 said: I see what you mean about 61-62. I can make that transition much smoother, but at 46 I was trying to go for a drastic change in mood from previous measures. Do you notice anything else? Nop, I really enjoyed your music, I hope to hear more. 1 Quote
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