Trio in b minor (WIP)

Here is a trio in b minor that I started! I have been trying to improve my writing skills, so I was wondering how you like the idea so far!

Dear @Guardian25,

I find this quite nice! I love the imitative voicing! Nice sequence in b.10-12.

There's a parallel 5th in b.15 btw flute and violin in the first beat. The perfect 4th in b.9 btw flite and violin is ok but I may change that to a 3rd or 6th since I think using fauxbourdon here is quite thick. B.19-20 last semiquaver there's a parallel octaves between flute and cello + L.H. of harpsichord.

I really suggest you to add slurs to the instruments! Even in a baroque piece it's not always non-legato esp. for the quick semiquavers!

Some f and p contrast can be added esp. in a trio sonata!

I really enjoy this opening! Hope you can finish the movement and share it here!

Henry

Hi!
Straight to what I found "troublesome" or at least worth mentioning:
• The audio, at least on my end, is a little unbalanced and saturated. The harpsichord eats the flute on the very first bars; then it's eaten by the strings too.
• Since the work is not completed and I am not sure of how much you've worked on this, perhaps it's that you just haven't reached this point yet, but just in case: I don't see articulation nor dynamics in any instrument (the latter is usual considering it's a harpsichord, though there are ways to produce dynamics there too) and in my humble opinion, these alone would improve the current state of this piece significantly. More specifically, just putting slurs properly in the flute and strings may likely help any potential performer, unless you do want the whole piece to be non-legato which is very legit too of course.

The idea is good so far and I look forward to see this trio finished. Keep writing mate, for that's —likely— one of the most effective ways of improving those skills, isn't it?

Kind regards,
Daniel–Ømicrón.

52 minutes ago, Henry Ng Tsz Kiu said:

Dear @Guardian25,

I find this quite nice! I love the imitative voicing! Nice sequence in b.10-12.

There's a parallel 5th in b.15 btw flute and violin in the first beat. The perfect 4th in b.9 btw flite and violin is ok but I may change that to a 3rd or 6th since I think using fauxbourdon here is quite thick. B.19-20 last semiquaver there's a parallel octaves between flute and cello + L.H. of harpsichord.

I really suggest you to add slurs to the instruments! Even in a baroque piece it's not always non-legato esp. for the quick semiquavers!

Some f and p contrast can be added esp. in a trio sonata!

I really enjoy this opening! Hope you can finish the movement and share it here!

Henry

 

Thanks! For the feedback! I will edit those spots,, one of the things I want to improve on is my counterpoint skills, so I appreciate you pointing those mistakes out!

I will also look to incorporate slurs into it, I honestly usually never add those type of marking. So maybe I should work on using those now, and the same with dynamics, I will experiment with those as well!

Thanks for the feedback! 🙏 

35 minutes ago, Omicronrg9 said:

Hi!
Straight to what I found "troublesome" or at least worth mentioning:
• The audio, at least on my end, is a little unbalanced and saturated. The harpsichord eats the flute on the very first bars; then it's eaten by the strings too.
• Since the work is not completed and I am not sure of how much you've worked on this, perhaps it's that you just haven't reached this point yet, but just in case: I don't see articulation nor dynamics in any instrument (the latter is usual considering it's a harpsichord, though there are ways to produce dynamics there too) and in my humble opinion, these alone would improve the current state of this piece significantly. More specifically, just putting slurs properly in the flute and strings may likely help any potential performer, unless you do want the whole piece to be non-legato which is very legit too of course.

The idea is good so far and I look forward to see this trio finished. Keep writing mate, for that's —likely— one of the most effective ways of improving those skills, isn't it?

Kind regards,
Daniel–Ømicrón.

 

Thanks for the insight! I am still trying to figure out how to render the sounds. Like you said the balance between the instruments are off and I will need to work on how to balance the sounds better. I have also been working with the new musescore update, so I'm still trying to get more familiar with the software!

I will also experiment with the articulations as well! Once I get the main parts finished I will add those and dynamics! 

Thanks for the feedback! 🙏