Motet: Oh Woe is Me, My Heart doth Break

This is a motet I composed based on a poem written by ChatGPT. Also, I'm not sure many people will notice, but this motet was also heavily inspired by Bach's BWV Anh. 159 ""Ich lasse dich nicht, du segnest mich denn."

What do y'all think? Any criticism regarding word placement and counterpoint is greatly appreciated!

Hi @Hcab5861,

Throughout the piece you use mature and great suspensions which achieve great tragic effect for me.I love in b.9 when the soprano falls when singing "fall", nice word painting. Very nice use of that famous bassline of the Purcell's Didos in b.11!

There's a parallel octave in b.9 between S and B. Also personally I think adding some slightly sweeter moments in major mode would make the minor ending even sadder!

I am curious why the program can sing with the lyrics!

Thanks for sharing!

Henry

9 hours ago, Henry Ng Tsz Kiu said:

Hi @Hcab5861,

Throughout the piece you use mature and great suspensions which achieve great tragic effect for me.I love in b.9 when the soprano falls when singing "fall", nice word painting. Very nice use of that famous bassline of the Purcell's Didos in b.11!

There's a parallel octave in b.9 between S and B. Also personally I think adding some slightly sweeter moments in major mode would make the minor ending even sadder!

I am curious why the program can sing with the lyrics!

Thanks for sharing!

Henry

 

Thank you for pointing out those sneaky parallel octaves! I didn’t notice them :0 I’ll definitely fix them later today! 

On 2/26/2023 at 10:44 PM, Henry Ng Tsz Kiu said:

Hi @Hcab5861,

Throughout the piece you use mature and great suspensions which achieve great tragic effect for me.I love in b.9 when the soprano falls when singing "fall", nice word painting. Very nice use of that famous bassline of the Purcell's Didos in b.11!

There's a parallel octave in b.9 between S and B. Also personally I think adding some slightly sweeter moments in major mode would make the minor ending even sadder!

I am curious why the program can sing with the lyrics!

Thanks for sharing!

Henry

 

Alright. I fixed the parallel octaves last night and made a some other minor changes. I’ll post the updated score here later today 🙂

On 2/26/2023 at 10:44 PM, Henry Ng Tsz Kiu said:

Hi @Hcab5861,

Throughout the piece you use mature and great suspensions which achieve great tragic effect for me.I love in b.9 when the soprano falls when singing "fall", nice word painting. Very nice use of that famous bassline of the Purcell's Didos in b.11!

There's a parallel octave in b.9 between S and B. Also personally I think adding some slightly sweeter moments in major mode would make the minor ending even sadder!

I am curious why the program can sing with the lyrics!

Thanks for sharing!

Henry

 

I forgot to mention the program I used is cantamus.app. It’s awesome and highly recommend it!

I loved it! Specially from M20 all the way to the end. Perhaps it was a little brief and there was a lack of "movement" overall but that'd be all.

The pricing on this website you mentioned seems reasonable.

Kind regards,
Daniel–Ømicrón.

Here's the slightly updated version!

On 2/28/2023 at 7:15 PM, Omicronrg9 said:

I loved it! Specially from M20 all the way to the end. Perhaps it was a little brief and there was a lack of "movement" overall but that'd be all.

The pricing on this website you mentioned seems reasonable.

Kind regards,
Daniel–Ømicrón.

 

Thank you for your kind regards! Also, regarding the repetitive rhythm, I'll give you a hint: it symbolizes something in the text 😉