Symphony #°3 in G minor (2nd movement)

Hi forum,

You'll find below the second movement of my third symphony (1st movement in another previous post).

Have a nice day 🙂

Hi @Marc Deflin,

For the overall structure I like how you retain the G minor in the introduction to cohere between movements. You even use material from the 1st mov. when G minor is back in the latter half.

I will go straight to places I feel like less reasonable:

In b.29 I may add a tremolo for the timpani semibreve note as it's quite dry for me here.

In b.41 is the tone clash of F# and F natural intentional? I think the clash is too intentional and not quite effective since they exist with not enough reason, and it's not uses again later.

In b.53 even I like your idea of using motto theme, I feel like the G major disappeears with no reason and G minor appears with no motion. I think at least having the G major tragically conquered will be better than hi-and-bye appearence. Also the G minor material just appears without any new meaning added for me. I think recurrence of theme is great given that new combination and context has provided a different perspective of the same materials, but not just appearing with no new things added. The same as the recapitulation of a sonata form.

B.61 for me is quite bare btw flute and horn in a fourth apart without a 3rd voice. You can try to have a faxbourdon texture there to have an interlocking first inversion chord.

B.83 has a nepolitan six-four chord instead of a sixth chord. It's OK for me though not usual I guess.

I like the ending having some motions. But the ending clarinet in its high range will be very squeaky but you are having a p there. Do you really want that timbre?

Also for me it's fine to end on a dominant chord at the end, bit you may have to add an "attaca" marking to.make sure next movement will be played immediately.

Thanks for sharing!

Henry

Hi @Henry Ng Tsz Kiu and thanks for this new review.

In b.29 the aim is indeed that the sound be quite dry.

In b.41 is the tone clash of F# and F isn't intentional, I fixed it.

In b.53 I like your idea of "having the G major tragically conquered", I'll think about such features in the future.

About the ending clarinet, the way it sounds in the audio rendering is fine for me...

3rd and last movement upcoming in a few days/weeks.

Thanks again 😉

Marc