Iuditha

This is a short piano piece I composed. I hope you like it!

https://youtu.be/Zc4xDN8tXZU

I think it is a very well resolved romantic piece on the formal level, with some harmonic variation in the development. The main part is, for my taste, a bit too "fixed" in terms of its pulse, not only because the first note of the measures is reinforced, but also because the motivic figures occupy almost constantly a measure. The middle part (as from b. 52 to b. 62) is very effective in breaking and contrasting.

 

Hi @Moueen Issa,

This is an enjoyable rondo with interesting episodes.I love that French Sixth cord in b.13 and later passages. What I like most is your voicing actually. The melody appears to be not smooth for good expressive effect, and the voicing is very fluent for creating that effect, which moves the piece well. I agree with Luix with the fixed main part but it's fine for me since it's a rondo in short time.

Thx for sharing!

Henry

Hi @Moueen Issa,

What I think it is the weakest point in this piece is the rythm of your first theme, in the first 4 bars, you use 4 different rythmic cells, that makes the music to have no sense of direction, this is pretty good for development sections but not for the theme! As the harmony is very well built and rich it is a pity that rythm isn't 😞. Also you use dorian mode in the theme (by using a descending bassline) but that's all the modes you use, have you htought of using modes outside the theme? This is just an observation, the piece is perfect as it is now.

If I were you I would check the final bars, the fluency of music is suddenly cut.

Besides those picky observations, it is indeed a very enjoyable piece!