Waltz Simplex in C# Major

A simple Chopin-esque waltz inspired by Chopin's Op.70 No.3 and Op.69 No.2.Lemme know what you think!

Waltz_Simplex_in_C_minor.mid

I think this piece has many values. The melody is catchy and well designed, as well as the general formal structure and the tonal relationship (very classical) of the parts. Also the chromaticisms are perfectly placed.
There are, however, some points I would like to comment on:
1. The trills on triplets in the second part, from measure 18 on, do not work very well. Especially from measure 28 onwards, where they are even more abundant.  
2. Textural changes: for example from measure 22, where the first note in the left hand is a single note and it is the usual, but then there is a 3-note chord followed by another single note. I think this creates an imbalance. I would look for more stable patterns and maybe not so dense (no need for the three notes in the accompaniment chord), at least up to a certain climactic point.
3. The crossing of the voices seems unnecessary in measures 55, 62, etc. ....

Apart from this and as a very subjective opinion, I don't like the exact repetitions in this style closer to romanticism than to classicism (where they are the norm).

Although the virtual sound is pleasant, what this piece cries out for is the use of dynamics and rubato. As it is, and with those repetitions, it comes off as very flat, when it is not.
 

Thank you for the feedback! Yes, I 100% agree this needs more dynamics + rubato. I didn't add anything as I left the dynamics up to the pianist. Also, regarding the trill on the triplets, they don't sound good because Musescore messed it up 😞 They sound much better when I play them on my piano!

Nice job.  I think the problem with the trills could easily be solved by including nested triplets as a kind of quick mordant (I think the problem is also that you notated them as trills rather than as mordents which is what they really are, but I don't know if Musescore will perform mordents any better in this situation).  Thanks for sharing!

Edit:  I just looked up exactly what a mordent is supposed to be and it turns out that these aren't actually mordents.  But the old Baroque symbol for a trill might be more true to what you actually want performed here instead of the "tr"s you have.  Edit again:  actually there does seem to be such a thing as an upper mordent rather than the lower variety.  LoL

Hi @Hcab5861,

Should the title be "Waltz Simplex in C# 'Minor'"?

I quite enjoy this simple waltz especially when it's in my favourite key. My favourite section is the middle section in tonic major when you add a voice to form some counterpoint there!

On 7/17/2023 at 12:04 PM, PeterthePapercomPoser said:

I think the problem with the trills could easily be solved by including nested triplets as a kind of quick mordant (I think the problem is also that you notated them as trills rather than as mordents which is what they really are, but I don't know if Musescore will perform mordents any better in this situation).

I agree with Peter on the trill issue and the solution of using mordent. If the Musescore doesn't work well, you can simply have those notes written out in 16th notes triplet. For b.24 the trill will better be a lower mordent G#-F#-G# since there's already an A after it.

On 7/17/2023 at 12:40 AM, Luis Hernández said:

3. The crossing of the voices seems unnecessary in measures 55, 62, etc. ....

I agree with Luis on this too, you can just have the top notes for top voice without crossing I think.

P.S.

On 7/17/2023 at 12:04 PM, PeterthePapercomPoser said:

Edit:  I just looked up exactly what a mordent is supposed to be and it turns out that these aren't actually mordents.  But the old Baroque symbol for a trill might be more true to what you actually want performed here instead of the "tr"s you have.  Edit again:  actually there does seem to be such a thing as an upper mordent rather than the lower variety.  LoL

Great edits LoL...

Thx for sharing!

Henry