89p0o5322ef Posted September 22, 2023 Posted September 22, 2023 (edited) . Edited February 7 by 89p0o5322ef 1 Quote
PeterthePapercomPoser Posted September 22, 2023 Posted September 22, 2023 Nice job! You made good use of the harmonic minor scale in your melody (and also the classical melodic minor scale). There is also some interesting canonic imitation between the left and right hand. The contrasting B theme also uses a 6/16 hemiola that brings rhythmic variety. There's a lot of stuff packed into this really short piece! Next you could try and find ways to extend your pieces to make them longer. You could use your little a b a scheme you have in this piece as a big A that would then be contrasted by a big B in maybe a slower tempo or a different key. Thanks for sharing! 1 Quote
Henry Ng Tsz Kiu Posted September 25, 2023 Posted September 25, 2023 Hi Aaron, I really think that you have improved much! Apart from what Peter had said, you are really exploring different keys this time and the piece appears more flowing than your previous ones. The changing of rhythm in b.25 is really nice for me for the hemiola usage. I may use a D major chord for b.48 for a return to G minor next bar. FOr the tied figure in b.19 actually I think you can just use a dotted note for that. I may also use the melodic minor instead for the main theme with a F natural replacing the F# in the top line, but that's personal. Thx for sharing! Henry 1 Quote
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