Ignoring the title ( and notation issues in the video score ), what do you think about this piece?

Just wanna know what do y'all think/feel abt this (not serious) piece : ) Thks!

https://musescore.com/user/62605720/scores/10255705

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wd8i6F1D9NM&list=PLxbKe4Vkc02zy5-CUMvRyo0ujLQd-6Pi8&index=2

* On the notation end, there had been ( at least I personally found them to be ) a few notation ( clef ) issues in the score which I used to generate into a video score to be published to Youtube. I have changed the clefs of a couple of the bars for score readability in the updated score in Musescore but not in the video score as I don't want to delete and re-upload it again.

Hi @Aw Ke Shen,

I don’t know why, the rhythm here reminds me of the famous Indian song!

Before b.61 I think you wanna have the diminished seventh representing the devil. I think it’s good but you can have invited more contrast in it, for example having more diatonic chords to provide some contrast, like the G minor chord you use.
 

I think the contrasting section of b.62 is somewhat strange with the bare octaves, but I guess that’s the devil’s confusion right?

In the next section you are getting the texture thicker which is good, and I like your D ,in or outburst in b.115, since there is finally contrast! I think again you can have more harmonic progression there, instead having the D minor all the time!

I think there will be a final outburst after the gothic section but no I am wrong. Maybe a final crazy devil’s dance will be great too!

Thx for sharing!

Henry

music!

1 hour ago, Henry Ng Tsz Kiu said:

famous Indian song

lol. guess its the articulations and rythms - influence fr being in percussion in band in my schooling yrs. ( the first motifs and accompaniments of this piece was written back then )

1 hour ago, Henry Ng Tsz Kiu said:

contrasting section of b.62

( just my own personal take here ) I thought that as more of a more silent transition btw the parts, to take a break ( a suspenseful one ) bf the piece builds all the way up to the climax, and also as a little chase scene ( rly dk wht I was thinking - was writing this ( as w many other pieces ) without rly having an actual plot. Just by some..." music sense " I guess... Idk. Or maybe I was possessed...

1 hour ago, Henry Ng Tsz Kiu said:

diatonic chords

1 hour ago, Henry Ng Tsz Kiu said:

more harmonic progression there, instead having the D minor all the time

Yea, wanted a try at experimentation, maybe even atonality. Guess not having any seriously-specific form gives that allowance.

1 hour ago, Henry Ng Tsz Kiu said:

I think there will be a final outburst after the gothic section but no I am wrong. Maybe a final crazy devil’s dance will be great too!

Ooh lol, not having an outburst in this context ends up becoming a surprise. Yea, I thought so, I could not decide btw a crazy and a tragic finale ( but now I think abt it they are not mutually exclusive ). Initially ended with a explosive climax ( sim to m 134, 136 ) as w Grieg's In Hall Of Mountain King. But I was too tempted ( even sadistic, but intended only to the devil ) to make slightly more slow burning a tragedy, rather than just a quick hype, so why not add a last slower, solemner part ( and also as a contrast )? Wanted the off beat note of the LH ( and of the piece ) to rep the devil's inability to even breath his last breath properly, just as the piece ends in an off-beat of the last beat of the bar rather than the first beat of the next bar. Now that I think abt it, the ending can be interpreted as being tragic, but not to the devil, but to any entity involved, but whtv...

27 minutes ago, Aw Ke Shen said:

Yea, wanted a try at experimentation, maybe even atonality. Guess not having any seriously-specific form gives that allowance.

The music here appears quite diatonic here for me! Diminished seventh is quite often featured here and maybe you can add more variety to that too!

30 minutes ago, Aw Ke Shen said:

Ooh lol, not having an outburst in this context ends up becoming a surprise. Yea, I thought so, I could not decide btw a crazy and a tragic finale ( but now I think abt it they are not mutually exclusive ). Initially ended with a explosive climax ( sim to m 134, 136 ) as w Grieg's In Hall Of Mountain King. But I was too tempted ( even sadistic, but intended only to the devil ) to make slightly more slow burning a tragedy, rather than just a quick hype, so why not add a last slower, solemner part ( and also as a contrast )? Wanted the off beat note of the LH ( and of the piece ) to rep the devil's inability to even breath his last breath properly, just as the piece ends in an off-beat of the last beat of the bar rather than the first beat of the next bar. Now that I think abt it, the ending can be interpreted as being tragic, but not to the devil, but to any entity involved, but whtv..

I don't know, personally I think the opening figure and particuarly the rhythm is quite overloaded throughout the piece and therefore I would like a contrast of it at the end! I was thinking of the outburst of @Thatguy v2.0's prelude no.9:

Henry

22 hours ago, Henry Ng Tsz Kiu said:

add more variety to that too

Ah, noted.

22 hours ago, Henry Ng Tsz Kiu said:

would like a contrast of it at the end

Oh I see. Yea, its just largely that opening motif repeated throughout, and hving a contrast would be fresh and less laborious.

22 hours ago, Henry Ng Tsz Kiu said:

outburst of @Thatguy v2.0's prelude no.9:

Thks for the recommendation.

I like original use of harmony in this piece!  Starting on a diminished chord sounds especially cool to me in this context.  Also, great use of octatonic scale and effective contrast through half-step planing (which you also use to create more and more tension to the line at meas. 83 - 100).  Although you still use too much repetition, I think it's excusable here because of your portrayal of the character it is meant to have and his dance.  And I love the part where the piece slows down to a crawl with lots of pauses towards the end as if the devil has finally exhausted himself!  You don't resolve the piece at all just ending it on the same diminished chord on which it started LoL - thanks for sharing!

Peter