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Hello everyone

Below I have attached one of my orchestral pieces, titled Spring. This work encapsulates the essence of spring's awakening, as the frost melts, and the flowers begin to bloom.

Note: I am a simple brass man; a member of the plain folk who do not make sound with strings or pieces of wood, so if there are any notational or capability issues with strings and especially harp, any feedback would be appreciated.

Thank you and I also appreciate the warm welcome I received to the forum from my last post!

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Very nice work!

The only notational issue I can spot with the harp, is that you haven't included pedal diagrams (which composers are normally expected to provide).

One other minor issue, is that some of your hairpins have no target dynamic at the end.

If you do that, the musicians within the section could each make different decisions about where to go.

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1) Instead of divisi, consider, putting the top part n the viola and divide within the violins.  Makes it even thicker with a great depth of sound.

2) Put a double bar break at Measure 11.  This will let the musicians subliminally know something is going on there.  I would also put "!!" as a rehearsal bar there.  Also, instead of doubling, maybe harmonize?  counterpoint there?  build vertical not just horizontally.

3.) Your divisi beaming should be split to allow for ease of reading.

4.) When the stings enter, don't be afraid to take that harp solo up and octave.  The range of the harp is GRAND! use it1. It will cut through even more.

5.) Overall, you have a great sense of melody. I strongly recommend you added more counterpoint here. It was the piece so much stronger and it give the musical edge .

 

My $0.02

 

 

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