Starting writing this nocturne

Hello! I recently started writing this Nocturne for my final project in my Music Appreciation class. I wanted to know your thoughts on the A section so far. As you can tell there will be a contrasting B section that hasn't been completed. But what can I improve on this piece?

I FORGOT TO ADD "ADAGIO" TO THE TOP PRETEND ITS THERE.

Oh I like where you were about to take this! Those heavy triplets at the end were really cool, it gave me Rach or Debussy vibes. I'd continue that and develop it into something mysterious... idk lol. Have you been working on this? I'd love to hear this completed.

Are you a pianist? Can you play this?

The overall sketch has been completed minus a couple parts where I need to change some stuff. So it’s almost completely done at least for my presentation in class. I plan to extend it later though. I do play piano but unfortunately playing this is too high of a level for me. But someday I’ll be able to perform it. I know I will.

On 3/24/2024 at 12:09 PM, Gabriel Carlisle said:

The overall sketch has been completed minus a couple parts where I need to change some stuff. So it’s almost completely done at least for my presentation in class. I plan to extend it later though.

Awesome

On 3/24/2024 at 12:09 PM, Gabriel Carlisle said:

I do play piano but unfortunately playing this is too high of a level for me. But someday I’ll be able to perform it. I know I will.

Awesomer

ok here it is! This is probably done for the project at least. I'll extend it in various areas and such later.

Also I'm curious if this nocturne fits better for:

A stargazer
A couple of romantics
A mother and her infant
One who is asleep
An old city at night (18th century)
A sunrise

Hey @Gabriel Carlisle!

I listened to this most recent version above.  I really like it!  To me it's much more suited to depicting a stargazer, someone sleeping, or a sunrise.  I don't really think it would fit the city in particular.  I really love your use of parallel motion and major 7th chords!  Also - very effective modulation to F# minor and back to E major.  The tempo changes and poco rit.'s were also well placed and added much humanization to the piece and made it much less square even in a computer rendition.  Thanks for sharing!