Night City

Hello Guys,

A new music piece with a male vocalist. Here's the lyric:

As night falls upon the city's embrace,
Neons shimmer like a thousand eyes,
And watch over us with silent grace,
Beneath the dark and starless skies, oh.

It seems the skyscrapers move slowly,
Like giants in their timeless stride,
In the city's heart, where dreams are unholy,
And whispers of secrets, in shadows hide, oh.

The red moon's gentle glow, a guiding light,
Guilty souls appear in the velvet night,
Whispers of dark wild dreams take flight,
In the cruel realm where shadows alight, oh.

Let us dance beneath the neon haze,
In the symphony of the night's embrace,
In the darkness, our hearts are in blaze,
And in chaos, our souls find their grace, oh.

The red moon's gentle glow, a guiding light,
Guilty souls appear in the velvet night,
Whispers of dark wild dreams take flight,
In the cruel realm where shadows alight, oh.

Hi @olivercomposer!

Wow!  Kudos on working with a live recording of the lyrics!  Did you write the lyrics yourself?  They're pretty good!  Maybe the "oh's" at the end of each verse/stanza seem a bit melodramatic but I can see why you included them - they act to conclude and create a kind of recurring coda to each verse.  I love the modulation into major - that's a great contrast.

The production value is pretty good but somewhat disjointed between the instrumental and the audio of the singer which seems (to me) to be of a slightly lower quality than the vst's.  I know this is probably meant to be futuristic sounding but to me it sounds more steampunk/gothic.  Overall, great job though!  Thanks for sharing.

3 hours ago, PeterthePapercomPoser said:

Hi @olivercomposer!

Wow!  Kudos on working with a live recording of the lyrics!  Did you write the lyrics yourself?  They're pretty good!  Maybe the "oh's" at the end of each verse/stanza seem a bit melodramatic but I can see why you included them - they act to conclude and create a kind of recurring coda to each verse.  I love the modulation into major - that's a great contrast.

The production value is pretty good but somewhat disjointed between the instrumental and the audio of the singer which seems (to me) to be of a slightly lower quality than the vst's.  I know this is probably meant to be futuristic sounding but to me it sounds more steampunk/gothic.  Overall, great job though!  Thanks for sharing.

 

Thanks for your response! I wrote the lyrics.