Expansion of Earlier Work

Hey guys, a couple weeks ago I posted a study called "luscious" for string orchestra. Today I have it here as an expanded piece. The beginning is nearly the same, expect with an accelerando in the A'' section, so that when the A'' section appears at the end, it has more impact. There are many pieces of advice taken from others, importantly modulation. frankly, these are not fabulous examples of the modulation you have been asking for, as they don't don't happen on the climaxes of melodies, which does not come to me naturally. I'm working on another exercise which will hopefully do that in a convincing manner, however this was more of a brain itch than an effort to improve.

Wow!  This is much better!  This exemplifies perfectly very expressive use of chromatic neighbor tones and beautiful suspensions.  Even without looking at the score I could immediately hear an improvement in the emotional impact of the music (at least to me).  Very well done!  It has a somewhat tragic pathos to it - near the end it really rises to a kind of screaming misery that is very affecting!  Thanks for sharing!

Oh, this is a must-listen.
I don't doubt Mahler's influences, which I find so difficult.
It is very moving and at times mournful, for example in the opening crescendo between bars 23 and 33.
The following progressive entrance of wind and brass instruments is fantastic. The polyphony is superb. And it's phenomenal that the strings give way from measure 54 or so. The transition here between a very consonant atmosphere to a slightly more dissonant one and back is well constructed.
Another change at 111, back to nostalgia. With a greater orchestral density, but soft, to go growing.

I congratulate you enormously because it seems to me a very careful and effective work. 

On 4/29/2024 at 11:06 AM, Luis Hernández said:

Oh, this is a must-listen.
I don't doubt Mahler's influences, which I find so difficult.
It is very moving and at times mournful, for example in the opening crescendo between bars 23 and 33.
The following progressive entrance of wind and brass instruments is fantastic. The polyphony is superb. And it's phenomenal that the strings give way from measure 54 or so. The transition here between a very consonant atmosphere to a slightly more dissonant one and back is well constructed.
Another change at 111, back to nostalgia. With a greater orchestral density, but soft, to go growing.

I congratulate you enormously because it seems to me a very careful and effective work. 

 

 

Thank you for giving it a listen and describing what you liked about it. It seems like you understood and appreciated my piece the most at the parts I also cared the most about.

On 4/27/2024 at 12:25 PM, PeterthePapercomPoser said:

Wow!  This is much better!  This exemplifies perfectly very expressive use of chromatic neighbor tones and beautiful suspensions.  Even without looking at the score I could immediately hear an improvement in the emotional impact of the music (at least to me).  Very well done!  It has a somewhat tragic pathos to it - near the end it really rises to a kind of screaming misery that is very affecting!  Thanks for sharing!

 

Thank you for listening! I appreciate your feedback from before, helping me get this piece right.