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Hi @Cafebabe,

I find the first movement quite Mozartean. It certainly reminds me his A minor Piano Sonata. I think in the development you can invite more modulations, instead of lurking around in A minor for a long time! It’s the key of the 2nd subject so it will be somewhat less interesting staying in that key for a long time. The end of the development is very much like the end of the development of Mozart’s A minor Sonata. Modulating to tonic major in recapitulation before going back to tonic minor in the 2nd subject is quite interesting.

The second movement is very much like pieces in “the Children Pieces” which I use to teach my students! It’s light hearted. Using Subtonic major as 2nd movement key is quite interesting.

The third movement is quite exciting. The modulation around b.75 is interesting, but the move to six flat key signature is not necessary. Is the movement in rondo form?  I find the materials in there is somewhat less organized. For example I find the chorale section in b.127 quite unrelated with the movement! The vivace fugato is quite confusing as the transition to it and from it is quite abrupt. The ending however is quite exciting!

I am quite nit picky here, but you probably compose much better than when I was 16 years old! Congrats for writing a multi movement work!

Henry

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Overall I think it is a great job. Maybe it could be a little more careful in terms of dynamics.
One thing that strikes me is that there are moments in the low register where the chords in block sound very closed. That seems to me a little out of style. Apart from that, in general, it is something to "avoid".
Another thing that I don't like very much and that I observe many times, is the speed of the first movement and the third movement (in this one less). It seems excessive to me (that's my taste). There are many works where the speed is justified. I don't know, it's an appreciation.

 

 

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