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Very interesting piece.

Regarding feedback I scanned the score and saw that you don't change time signature through out the piece.

For this type of music which seems to be "advent guard" like perhaps either one of these:


Create the ilusion of changed time signatures for example by having ideas on diffrent beats so it sounds like 4/4 even tho it is 3/4

or alternative:

Change timesignatures more frequently.

Or perhaps do both worlds.

This can make the piece more "lively" in away.

For inspiration if you haven't already listen to these pieces then i can recomend listening to them:

bela bartok mikrokosmos 

ligeti piano etudes  

I thought the harmony in this piece is on a pretty high level and notation wise.

An other thing i notice is that the right hand seems to have the forground pretty much all the way through(feel free to correct me if i am wrong)

This may also help created interest by changing the register of the focal point.

I guess you could say the underlaying principle which may help the overall piece is varity on a multi dimensional scale sort of(in terms of whats missing)

For example: Varity in the mention topics above.

Also reading keysignatures with so much modulation, flats, and sharps you might not need a keysignature at all.

This here may just be a personal taste but i feel like more contrast regarding the register could be beneficial as well for example using more high tones as the register seems mostly around the middle register somewhat. 

An other personal opinion:

For example in the scores i have recomended above (bela bartok and ligeti) they seem mostly to not just use an idea once and then forget about it for the rest of the score.

Think in repetition in thematic terms. How can this idea be repeated while still adding to the overall thematic story of the piece.

For example I think Bar 14 doesn't show up again later in the piece.

Every idea should be thought of how it connects through out time.

Over all I think you expressed the harmonic soundscape pretty damn well.

 

 

Posted (edited)

Thanks for the in depth review!

for the time signatures, I tried to implement that at mm. 8, 9 with the duples, although I am not sure if it is that obvious or effective.

another spot is at 76, where the left hand stays in triple and right wanders in duple eventually aligning back together

Yes, right hand is very much the prominent figure the entire time exept for mm. 10. However, it would be nice if you could suggest other spots that is fitting for left hand to be more prominent, as it is very easy to miss.

Yes, I originally intended mm. 14 to be a further development of the main B# C# F# theme, I think the octave leap made it unclear of my intent, I have added it to the development section.

thanks ken

Edited by Ho Sen Ken
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