Pianistikboy Posted October 5 Posted October 5 It's a long time that I hadn't composed a choral work a cappella. So, last month, I've composed this SSAATTBB piece with French lyrics. It's entitled 'Comme Une Rose' and it tackles three themes: The love relationship, through the metaphor of the rose, its scent and its thorns. Nature, through the wind that blows and scatters seeds, spreading life all over our Earth. Love, through a passionate declaration to the better half. So, this piece is just looking for its premiere! Â Do you like it? https://youtu.be/OqLnLF_yPDE Â Quote
mercurypickles Posted October 7 Posted October 7 This is really very lovely! Something about the way your phrases are constructed very much reminds me of Poulenc. He tended to write things in these little 2 to 4 bar phrases and then assemble them in sort of a mosaic-like way, you do something similar here. I love the transition into the more rhythmic passage at around 2:00, though I think you should take a look at the piece as a whole and consider adding some more unexpected harmonic motion. Almost all of your phrases end with either some kind of a dominant functioning chord or they end on your tonic (almost always e minor/E major). This can be very harmful to the flow of your piece, and it starts to sound predictable, especially when it’s stretched out to five minutes in length. That isn’t to say this specific piece is predictable in its entirety, but it’s something to keep an eye on for sure. Thank you for sharing! Quote
Pianistikboy Posted October 8 Author Posted October 8 Thank you too for listening and commenting. I'm glad you like it. I'm not used to listen to Poulenc music, but I need to fix this. You're right, the harmonies in this piece are quite simple but I think it was what I finally wanted. Yes the challenge when composing is to surprise the listener. The interest of this piece is also in the contrast between the 3 musical themes especially thanks to the middle ternary part where there's more life. Many thanks again for your feedback 😉 Quote
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