Treacherous - first works posted here hoping for some feedback

Hello all,

First post here.  I wrote this short piece about morality and inner moral conflict.  Hoping for some feedback.  

Cheers!

what up Mike

Cool music, it's got a cinematic flair. You've got some great talent, and your samples sound good. Don't be shy around here, feel free to post more and comment on others' work too; it's the best way to make friends and get feedback on your music. 

I get Skyrim vibes, and the portamento effects are really cool. Seems like you have a lot to offer the members here 🙂 

And welcome! Looking forward to hearing more from you. 

- A fellow guitarist

Hello @guitarman871 and welcome to the forum!

The music sounds amazingly well produced and rendered!  Your score on the other hand .. did you export this from cubase or something?  The beginning with the tremolo glissando is really a great way to begin the piece.  You use lots of extended techniques in this such as snap pizzicato and the aforementioned tremolo glissando in the beginning.  The only weakness of the piece is that it stays in the key of C minor for almost the whole duration.  You seem to try and remedy this by modulating to Db towards the end, but your modulation of just bringing the piece a half step up to bring some sudden freshness into the music is just a momentary fix, often used in Pop music.  It doesn't solve the problem of your music being harmonically pedestrian throughout most of its duration.  Simple harmonies can be very accessible and certainly, making your harmony more complex by itself won't necessarily make your music "better".  On the contrary over-complicating things too much can make music pedantic and pretentious.  But I would encourage you to explore how more different kinds of complex harmony can drastically expand the emotional palette of your music.  You could try using some tritone substitutions, augmented 6th chords, diminished chords instead of dominants, as well as chromatic mediants just to start.  Good luck in your future composition endeavors and I'm stoked to hear more of your music!

P.S.:  I also am a beginner guitar player LoL

Thank you both for your feedback.  I am interested in getting involved here so the warm welcome is appreciated.

Regards,

Mike

On 1/12/2025 at 1:12 AM, guitarman871 said:

Hello all,

First post here.  I wrote this short piece about morality and inner moral conflict.  Hoping for some feedback.  

Cheers!

 

 

 

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• treacherous

I like the gothic ambience. 

I feel like the harmony is a bit stagnant at some points and I think this piece will benefit a lot from having more clear phrases, each one with a very clear structural function. The climax is pretty epic too and the effects nicely executed.

So basically playing around with more harmonic variety and polishing the range of your melodies.