Adagio (introduction) for a larger scale work

Thought I'd share this work in progress for any thoughts (ideally on the opening adagio). I
have only made some rough ideas for the subsequent Presto. 

I am still experimenting a little with more harmonic progressions... I personally like it, but please be honest if you think it works or not. I took inspiration form Haydn's symphony no 102 for the final shift from F minor to Fm7 in the introduction. 

I like it! The only bit that sounds a little funny to my ear is measure 10. No idea what i would do instead though

4 hours ago, user011235 said:

I like it! The only bit that sounds a little funny to my ear is measure 10. No idea what i would do instead though

 

Thank you for pointing that out. This should be g major chord followed by d major (in effect transitioning from C minor to G minor).

My placement of the A natural in the flute is what sounds funny. Because it clashes with both the G natural and B natural. I had reasoned this as a necessary dissonance (maintaining consistent intervalic movement in upper parts) that resolves on d major. This also gives primacy to the d major chord in that bar (A, F#). However now that you have pointed out I think there is a better solution. I’ll have to have a look later. 🙂