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Hello @Frank R. and welcome to the forum!

I like this piece!  You give lots of time for each individual instrument to shine before they both play in unison and double in a duet of 6th's.  To me, the piece has a certain Scottish or Irish or Celtic flavor to it, similar in style to Greensleeves.  What bothers me is perhaps that there's so much repetition without a contrasting section.  Also, measure 17 - 21 is what I perceive to be a 5 measure fragment that sounds like an incomplete thought and perhaps a poor transition back to the main theme.  Thanks for sharing and I'm looking forward to hearing more of your music and contributions to the forum!

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I agree with Peter.  This is a very pleasant little piece, strongly reminds me of Greensleeves, and some more contrast could be interesting to explore.  If good music is always a balancing act between predictability, so the audience knows what notes to expect next and it all feels like it "goes together," and surprising twists, this piece is leaning more toward the former.  (Which is fine, it's just a question of what you want to do).  

If you wanted to, one thing that tends to be characteristic of a development section is an unstable key.  If a wide variety of accidentals start showing up in the middle of your piece, you're probably on the right track for upping the excitement.  Try copy and pasting your main theme a few times and using your composition software to transpose it up or down and see if you hear anything that feels interesting.  

You could also try playing with the rhythms for more contrast.  What does it sound like if you take the melody twice as slow so eighth notes become quarter notes, or longer?  Is there a way to have one part doing that, while the other parts continue ticking along at your previously established pace?  This is a very soothing and restful piece, so maybe you don't want to interrupt its flow, but if you did want to inject a little drama, that could be a way to do it.  

I like it!

 

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