looking for feedback again on my new project's current progress - (Sorry, video link restored. Old attachment was no longer available)

Here's another update to this piece... Also looking for names... It's not often I begin writing a score without having a preset theme... Sort of just letting my mind do the work for me, then figure I'd name it later, but I'm open to suggestions in that regard as well! 😅 PLEASE be as detailed as you want! Let that music theory mind flow, and don't feel like you need to tiptoe! I'm full of humility 🙂 I can handle criticism 

Hi @UncleRed99!

I love the opening mood, but I feel like the instruments can move in a less homorhythmic fashion, and the strings can move more, for example in slow tremolos or other accompaniments, instead on holding long notes.I love the mood change in 2:4 which gives a softer texture without the strings. I like the modulation to E minor as it makes the music sound more earthly. As you have noted yourself, I do think you don’t present the E minor section long enough. For me, you should stay longer in that key by moving it to E minor’s related keys, or even a small climax on E minor, before getting back to F# minor in the Poco Adagio section. Also, the returning to the adagio section can have some textural change there, most notably for me the long held notes of strings! I like the texture in the Larghetto section, and I think you finally let the strings sing there! For me where you want some winds back, at most they should only be accompaniment, not even countermelodies because they are already featured much in the music, while the strings lack it! Thx for sharing!

Henry

I appreciate the insight. I felt the exact same way about it. I'm still more or less just throwing sounds onto the paper for purpose of a road-map. Just wanting to get the gist of what I want it to sound like after finalization. I restored the video link, as I deleted the old one due to having made a new one for current progress. Feel free to listen and commentate on it as it sits currently. Of course, while we both keep in mind what's already been mentioned. 😅