External Feedback Wanted for Year 11 Subject

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I wasn't able to upload my mp3 or ss so I've added an invitation link into the post. (Let me know if it doesn't work)

I'm currently in Year 11, studying a Year 12 subject, AIF. One of the criteria for this assignment is collecting external feedback from experts (Expert just means someone who has experience in the chosen area). I would appreciate anyone giving me some feedback, and helping to guide me potentially. 

Hello @Josephine_Maccrimmon,

Welcome to our forum!

I am not expert myself but lemme give you some feedback. I think the opening flute melody enters in the wrong key as the music is in G major but you have the flute enters in supertonic A minor but have a tonic G major harmony! The piano accompaniment and harmonic pattern can be more varied, as I find out that the piano accompaniment repeats in a ground bass fashion! Also, the texture and accompaniment pattern of the piano can definitey be more varied like using simple patterns like alberti bass or broken chords. Have some melodies for the piano as well!

Details would be very important as well. There isn't any dynmaic markings in the score, and no slurs! Slurs are pivotal for fluatist since they indicate their tonguing and how to play their notes!

I suggest you viewing our fellow members' work and look for their scoring and details! Thx for joining!

Henry

Thank you for this feedback, it gives me a to-do list basically, which will really come in handy, so thank you. I appreciate it very much.