Does this sound boring?

Not sure if I am overthinking. But I think the melody is slightly boring

Hi @Atlantis_!

Not sure which part exactly you consider to be the melody here.  I hear many melodic parts being played at once - it gives sort of an impression of "blooming" which I think the title of this track is meant to suggest.  There's a lot of motion in a spread and differentiated heterophonic texture.  I think it's wonderful - I don't hear anything boring here!  Now if you managed to continue it while also modulating to different key centers it would really create a delightfully rich composition!  Thanks for sharing.

6 minutes ago, PeterthePapercomPoser said:

Not sure which part exactly you consider to be the melody here.  I hear many melodic parts being played at once - it gives sort of an impression of "blooming" which I think the title of this track is meant to suggest.  There's a lot of motion in a spread and differentiated heterophonic texture.  I think it's wonderful - I don't hear anything boring here!  Now if you managed to continue it while also modulating to different key centers it would really create a delightfully rich composition!  Thanks for sharing.

Agreed. I hear this as a collage of color. Perhaps if it continued, a high soaring melodic line to hold our ears would be welcomed, and I'd be curious where you would go from here. Lovely music so far.

Thank you for the feedback @Thatguy v2.0 and @PeterthePapercomPoser. I was thinking of a flower collage when creating this. 

Notating the next segment (Correctly) is so important. Since my music theory is not up to par, I am concerned about making many mistakes.

Hi @Atlantis_,

Besides what Peter and Vince said, I think texturally the melodic line for each instruments can be distinguished more by setting them in different register! I think here the register is a bit overlapped and hence the sound is not clear enough. Adding a pdf score would definitely help our analysis. Thx for sharing!

Henry

Thanks @Henry Ng Tsz Kiu. I'll redo some of the viola and cello parts. Or at least try to. 

@Atlantis_

I see you just edited your post.  Honestly, I think it would be better if you just posted your newly revised version of your piece as a reply to the thread or maybe upload the new version with "ver. 2" in the title so that the newcomers to the topic can listen to the old and new version side by side and compare.  What's also frustrating is that I wrote my original review for a piece that people are now unable to hear because you changed it.  And I honestly think the original version was better and that's the version that I praised in my review but this new version sounds muddled and unclear and worse than the original imo.

I agree. I applied way too much gain. I can switch it back tomorrow.

I have two different headphones. 1 of them is high-end (Focal Stellia) and makes the sound more spaced and "even"; even with the high gain. Then there are the regular headphones (WH-1000XM5) and I have no idea why it sounds so muddled with these. I just heard it. This is all a work in progress, thanks for the feedback! I think I made a few minor improvements but the additional gain undid almost all of it. 

Adding higher (subtle) legato strings. And an additional layer of Spitfire's Chamber Strings on top of Orchestral Tools: Berlin Strings