Nocturne in Ab Major

Nocturne written by me, any and all feedback is appreciated

A very beautiful and sensitive work. I also find it harmonically rich. A good technique to intermingle the melody with the arpeggio.
The sound is a bit muffled and strange, it seems to be a direct recording, isn't it?
 

10 minutes ago, Luis Hernández said:

A very beautiful and sensitive work. I also find it harmonically rich. A good technique to intermingle the melody with the arpeggio.
The sound is a bit muffled and strange, it seems to be a direct recording, isn't it?
 

 

Thanks! Yes it’s from my phone camera

Very tender piece and performance, well done. My only suggestion would be to add a little more variety. A ton of variety isn't necessary in a short piece like this, where the whole thing feels like a single thought. But i would have liked to hear a little change from the pattern of simply one melody note every half measure. And I would've liked to hear those sixteenth notes last more than one measure. I felt like they had more to say.

2 hours ago, user011235 said:

Very tender piece and performance, well done. My only suggestion would be to add a little more variety. A ton of variety isn't necessary in a short piece like this, where the whole thing feels like a single thought. But i would have liked to hear a little change from the pattern of simply one melody note every half measure. And I would've liked to hear those sixteenth notes last more than one measure. I felt like they had more to say.

 

Thanks for the advice! The piece is somewhat constrained to what is easy for me to play technically at the moment