So i listened to a bunch of top audiojungle artists and thought "i can do that to". Well, it didn't quite work out. While writing this piece i thought that instrumentation and arrangement worked well, but listening to it now it sounds so silly and indirect, i feel frustrated. I can't put together in my head what is actually wrong with this composition, therefore don't know how to start correcting my mistakes as a composer.
I know basic music theory (triads, seventh chords, etc.), know some simple harmony rules and chord progressions (or just think i know them, listen and tell me=), but in practice it feels like i'm still having trouble putting it all together.
So what flaws does this piece have and what do i need to know to move forward?